作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。
Nowadays,more and more students intend to take part in social activities,at the same time,some people doubt if it is necessary for students to do that.I'm here to give my opinions. I support students to take part in social activities,first,because it can combine knowledge learnt from class and practise together,let students know more about the society.This will do good to them when they are graduated from school.Second,when doing social activities,students can get treasures and experience that will never find in class from it,these treasures will help them get through difficulties someday.Third,social activities can inspire students to study harder to adapt the society and prepare for the future.When they get admission from companies,they know what to do next. All in all,take any chances to take part in social activities.