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Last weekend I visited to the Beijing zoo, there are a great number of tourist in the zoo. I watched so many diffrent animals, just like monkey, tiger and panda. The visitor fed the monkey and play with tiger. I think the animals was very friendship to people, we should treat animals. However,we should not throw garbage anywhere because I believe that protect the environment as such important for everyone. If we know the important thing that protect the animals similarly we also defend ourselves.