高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

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My hometown is to me a paradise with a clean river, simple cottages and narrow streets. People are living a simple life even with their hard work. However, many years passed and things have changed a lot. With the appearance of high rises and all sorts of stores and shops, motor mobiles are busy all days on the streets and industry is developing very fast. Trees are becoming fewer and fewer. fish are disappearing and now it's our first important thing to deal with the pollution brought about with it.