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From:wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date:December 23rd ,2008 To:sales-department@hotmail.com Dear Mr.Johnson I anm writing to you to tell you that we are received the 3000 products from your company on December 23rd,but according to our signing of the No.35 order,the number of the products is 3500,we have not received the other 500 products so far.So,please check your product list.We are looking forward to your early reply! Yours, Wang Haiyang