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Thanks for your inviting,Happy birthday to you!I'd love to go to your birthday party,but I have too much things,so I can't go to.On weekends morning,I have to study at home,because I have a taste on next week。In evening,I must go shipping wiht my sister ,Next day ,I have to visit my grandmother in the other country。I‘m sorry ,but next I’am takeing the best gift whit you。