初中英语命题作文真题演练(60):假如你有一百万

简单句比重稍微偏高，文中有句子错误；衔接词汇很少，建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累；文章用词太过单一，且单词拼写错误较多；请注意分段；连词使用偏少；可以适当增加副词的使用。

If I have one million，I will buy a big school for pool childrens be able to go to school，and i will be become a rich wonman。I will be buy many colthes put in my big house。If I have one million,I will eat a big meal wiht my parents。And to study abroad。