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Nothing succeeds without a strong will Everyone knows that succession needs a strong will. A strong will is an important key and promise to the success. When we set a goal, we must pay more attention to it and do our best. The process on the road may be very hard, which needs us to spend time and patience. The person with a strong will can be a great one, such as Edison and Newton. The old say goes that there is a will,there is a way. As a student, we must put the will into our deep heart and keep chasing the goal. Without a strong will, it is tough to keep studying hard. If we were just saying instead of doing it, we would not win anymore.