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I live in a beautiful town .The tree,had clean leaf in which birds could be seen fling in the trees. The rive was very clean, and we can see some fish swimming in the river. Our home is very poor,however,things changed a lot this years. At present, you can see tall buildings, and stores,companies and so on. Many people have cars,they drive them to where they work. But with the development of industry, pollution is becoming more and more serious. A lot of trees have cut, and fish have caught by hunt and citizen. To our joy, people have been doing their best to stop pollution and make the town even more beautiful.