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I live in a beautiful town.The tree,had green leaf in which birds could be seen fling in the trees.Rive is so clean that we have seen some fish. Our home is very poor,however,things changed a lot this year. We move to another house and the tings changed,at present, you can see tall buildings, and stores,companies and so on. Many people have cars,they drive them to where they work. But with the development of industry, pollution is becoming more and more serious. A lot of trees have cut, and fish have caught by hunt and citizen. To our joy, people have been doing their best to stop pollution and make the town even more beautiful.I want to kill you.You are a pig,I want to eat your meat.