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With the develoment of society,and improment of people living level.more and more people would have a trip on the holiday.And the cost of trave already have increase in the recent year. Some people think that it's good for increase GDP,and people think,it's difficult for the common people.For them,the economic is the best way of jouney.Meanwhile,the ordinary people also hink,that is how a wasting. In my opinion,the entertainment should take ordinary people into considerte,but not just forbenefit of business.So,more and more people who like them could enjoy themselves.The goverment should involve in servies. In short, I hope that more and more people could travel enjoyment.
