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With the development of society,and improve of people living standard.More and more people would have a trip on holiday.And the cost of trave already have increase in the recent year. Some people think that it's good for increase GDP,and people think,it's difficult for the ordinary people.For them,the economic is the best way of jouney.Meanwhile,the ordinary people also think,that is how a wasting. In my opinion,the entertainment should take ordinary people into considerte,but not just forbenefit of business.So,more and more people who like them could enjoy themselves.The government should involve in servies. In short, I hope that more and more people could travel enjoyment.
