有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;句法方面做得很棒,但是从句不多;作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;请注意分段。
My favorite sport is basketball,which is a team sport suitable for both indoors and outdoors. I have been interested in basketball since Yao Ming,an NBA star from China,became the hero of millions of Chinese kids.Although as a basketball fan I am not tall enough,I believe it is helpful to my health,and just think what fun it is to play basketball for an hour or so after a tiring day!Besides,it gives me a good chance to make friends with a lot of schoolmates.