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With the development of society and the improvement of people's life,people live a better life.More and more people would like trip on holiday.And the cost of trave already have increase in the recent year. Some people think that it's good for increase GDP,and people think,it's difficult for the ordinary people.For them,the economic is the best way of the journey.Meanwhile,the ordinary people also think,that is how a wasting. In my opinion,the entertainment should take ordinary people into considerate,but not just for benefit of business.So,more and more people who like them could enjoy themselves.The government should involve in service. In short, I hope that more and more people enjoyment travel.
