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The worst winter snow storm of 5 decades years turned South China into a world of white colour. Chinese Spring Festival approaching, the snow storm lasted for dozens of days and made it a hard way home for hundreds of thousands of people working outside their hometown. To those who were eager to go back home to reunion with their families after one or more years of departure(分别), the snow storm added to their anxiety and disappointment. The unwelcoming snow storm totally disturbed the step of the city, of the country. However, any nature disaster is not allowed to destroy our life as long as there is love. In the departure hall of railway station, the railway staff made explanation to the waiting passengers patiently , providing them with hot water and food. Doctors and nurses volunteered to help the sick. Traffic police and volunteers from the communities cleared the roads on every cold morning. Kind people from every corner of the country donated their money or clothes to help those waiting at the railway stations go through the hard time. True love exists in the world.