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in my mind College students should not hire cleaners first , college is a place where provides us with the chance to form indepence.cleaning dorms and other things when we face with in our college life by ourselves can help us to find a good job in the future. second,as a university student ,it is unsuit to waste money to hire cleaners because we can not earn money now.third ,we are not sure whether the cleaner is an honest person .in case things in dorms be dealt,we should not hire cleaners. all in all ,i do not agree college students to hire cleaners.cleaning dorms enhance our practical abilities and interrelationship among roommates.
