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Nowadays,computers are playing a more and more essencial role in our daily life,for example,we use computer to listen to gorgerous music,to watch fantistic movies in our leisure time without feeling bored,we can also go shopping online to make buy things more convinient and cheap,the most important thing computer can do for us is that we can communicat with anyone whenever and wherever he is via it.Computer makes our life more vividly,nevertheless it also has negetive influence for us. Because of the quickness and convinience of communicating on the internet,most of our young people would rather choose to talk on the computer than talk with people who sourround us.First of all,communicating on the internet by QQ,MSN and other tools is the new way to talk with people,but the traditional way by talking to people face to face is the real way to promote relationship between us,make someone to know the person who he talks with by speaker's action and tone that is the cold internet communication can't give us.Forthermore,talking on the internet with someone we don't know,perhaps to bring danger to us,they may cheat our money and other things even the our emotion,so it's safe to talk with our friends about our happiness and sadness,it will make all of us happy and relif.Last but not least,often talking on the internet may reduce our speaking techniques,we can learn a lot of things by talking with someone who have read lots of books or have abundance experience. In my opinion,there are a lot of positive merits that talking with people face to face can give us,so it's the best way we should choose in our future life.
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