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Notice Jun.12th, Wednesday Professor Zhang Ling from the Computer Department of Beijing University will come to our school to give us a talk on June 14th, Friday. He is going to talk about the use of computer and how to learn through the Internet. The lecture is to begin at 9:00 am in the meeting room, which is on the fifth floor of the teaching building. Those who are interested in computers are welcome to take an active part in it. You are required to prepare your questions in computer study before hand. Professor Zhang will leave you some time for your questions. Don’t forget to be there on time! The League Committee