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Dear Geoger: Welcome to my hometown this summer holiday.Let me introduce the household hotel in my hometown. If you choose the household hotel,you will learn chinese culture from it and feel warm because of the household.And the price is a little low.The single room 30 yuan a day.To my surprise,the double room 20 yuan a day.And you should pay 20 yuan for the food everyday if you want to eat chinese meal with the host.There are menu.So you could choose the food from the menu.Of course you also can do the food by yourself. And here are many actives.you can swim in the sea,climb mountain and labour in the greenhouse without paying if you want. Yours Li Hua