- 分享到:
文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词；可适当增加复合句的使用，注意个别句子错误；文章用了较为丰富的词汇，学术词汇略显单薄，同时注意单词拼写的检查。
in there days, the safety of our school is worse and worse ,for example ,many student say that their thing are stole ,and there have more and more arge between classmate so on. now, how can we stop this things? in order to the stole, we must improve our attiude. then we must to take care our propority. in order to the arge, when we want to do one thing, the first step is thinking other people's feeling if it will bring some troubles with him. then remember one thing,if you want to be expert ,you must to expert someone first. at last, security guard must be improve,so that to stop all the problems
