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My Favorite Sport Playing football is my biggest hobby; a chance to let you fall in love with football; find a football in the home on the road, and then to play with friends, and deeply in love with football; so I often after school and the students with training and competition; and my teammates and I set up profound friendship. I most like the football star is Beckham of Britain; he is very powerful. My biggest wish is to become a occupation football player. Because in the movement I can find the feeling of happiness.