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Increasing number of people a buy car.At the same time,people's opinions about "whether people buy a car or not" vary from person to person.Some people say that owning a car is convenient to people.To them,owning a car contribute to save time,meanwhile,it is safer than riding by bike.On the contrary,there are some people in favor of increasing number of car coming about many problem,including air pollution and traffic jams.More severely,it will bring on more and more traffic accident,which affect people's life. On my own perspective,government should control the number of cars,the reason is that a large number of cars affect our environment and control the number of cars will make great contribution to our environment which is clean and quiet.