作者词汇基础很好,也能较灵活使用学术词汇,望继续努力;文章在句法方面做的很棒,从句和复杂句的使用不错;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
My teacher was born into a peasant's family. When her teens, she goes abroad for further study. She was admitted into a key university after graduating from high school. After graduating from college, she laid the foundation for her comfortable life. Nowadays, she is in good health and recognized as a very talented girl. She has a vital influence on me. The reason is that she made herself worthy. She makes me realize what we should remember is that there is nothing that we can't overcome. What we have to do is holding on to the end. Whatever you fall far behind others or something else, don’t lose heart. It occurred to me that what is impossible.Now,what we need to do is to fulfil our duty of student and devoting ourselves to the better being of our society. Study is very important, because the more book we read, the more learn we become. Besides, I am greatly convinced that only when we are armed with enough knowledge can we stand out in the world. Hello Paul, here is some advice for you.Firstly,you can ask teachers or schoolmates for help.Secondly,believe it or not, don’t think too much your examination performance, because confidence is the key to come up with your classmates and we'd better to think what we can improve.Thirdly,doing more exercises is a good way to relax yourself, which contribute to sleep. In a word, what you have to do is that appreciate your life. At present, people are increasing in using Internet Slang. People’s opinions about "Should Internet Slang Be Forbidden" vary from person to person. Some people said that Internet Slang is vivid and fashionable that it contributes to chat conveniently, which is full of intelligence. On the contrary, other said Internet Slang is lack of logic and not accepted by most people, which has possibility of misunderstanding. On my own perspective, I believe that Internet Slang will be accepted finally. Consequently,what we have to do is that accept the trend of Internet Slang. There are many things we can do for our environment. For example, saving energy is a good way to protect our environment, which includes turning off light after using. What’s more, we can save used-water to water flowers, because it contributes to protect fresh water from waste. Protecting our environment is not only to our country's development and construction but also to ourselves. The reason why it is good for our country and ourselves is that our globe's energy and material is limited and we have to think about our future. Increasing number of people buy a car. At the same time, people’s opinions about "whether people buy a car or not" vary from person to person. Some people say that owning a car is convenient to people. To them, owning a car contribute to save time,meanwhile,it is safer than riding by bike. On the contrary, there are some people in favor of increasing number of car coming about many problem, including air pollution and traffic jams. More severely, it will bring on more and more traffic accident, which affect people's life. On my own perspective, government should control the number of cars, the reason is that a large number of cars affect our environment and control the number of cars will make great contribution to our environment which is clean and quiet.