希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Hello,everyone.My name is Wangfang.I come from Class3,Grade7.I study in The second school of Shanghai.There are 46 students in my class,including 24 boys and 22 girls.My good friends are Jim,Mike,Bill and Sandy.They are all from the USA.Mrs. Black is our English teacher.We like English best of all subjects.Everyone gets along well with others.