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Today,I hope you can give me a chance to introduce our company's robot.This kind of robot has a variety of function.First,It can play chess and have a chat with elder.second, that the robot is able to cock is that you can adjust its time.Last but not least,the robot can deal with emergency,including when elder being sick,and it will call emergency phone.
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