作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Tina is a friend of mine.She intends to visit to Beijing because she really wants to see the Great Wall.She thinks the Great Wall must be beautiful extremely.Besides the Great Wall,Beijing also has other nice sights ,such as the Summer Palace,the National Grand Theater and so on.Tina said,she maybe has a great deal of fun during this trip. Jim is my classmates.His plan for summer holiday is quite easy. He just wants to stay at home because he is too tired for his studies,and ready to have a good rest. My plan for this summer holiday is very easy,too.I will have sports to refine my health.Then,having a good rest,too. I hope all of us will spend a meaning holiday!