文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些学术词汇;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用;请注意分段。
I cannot agree the title more. Though the person who only has a strong will cannot be successful,nothing succeeds without a strong will. It is said the person who makes a great progress may have no gifts,but he must have a strong will.Only the man,who has a strong will can make it finally. Such are us students,too.We cannot make a great devotion unless we can study hard. We students should treat the studying as how soldiers treat the instructions.Please remember that study harder and harder,have a strong will in our full life.