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I have a good friend who called LiYu.He is eight years old.He has a fluent spoken-English.Not only this,but he also he has good points in every test.We all admire him very much. What is more,he is very handsome:bright black eyes,a high nose and a thick mouth,however I did not hate him,where he is well is where I am well. Such is my friend,a good person.