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How to improve the school safety School safety is a matter great importance. Great efforts should be made by the school to make sure the campus safe. Firstly, nobody but you should be allowed enter the school without permission. The guard take everyone entering school . the school should walk around the campus from time to time so that some bad people can be frightened away. More importantly, also but so education however oh could be offered by the school.can be taught what to when faced with danger. we keep safety in mind whatever we do. We shouldn trust strangers or give away our personal to them.
