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April 20th Tuesday. Sunny weather My home after finishing my homework, decided to go to the cinema。Going to the cinema, I found a foreigner, standing on the side of the road is very anxious. Then, you go on to ask what happened. Both were not to understand what someone is saying. Finally, you rely on body language to know the meaning. The foreigner wanted to go to the people's park. So you call a taxi, and told the driver where he will. Then, you go to the cinema. I am very happy today。