题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
从句比例偏少,简单句稍微偏多了;作者学术词汇方面要多累积,词汇表达不够丰富;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
Resently,computer has become more and more popular,and more and more people like to use the computer,because computer has lots of advantages. So,computer plays an important role in our lives.Now,we can communication with people though computer,and we can make friends with others people.And we can make business in the computer.we can find a good job, buy some things by the computer. Howere,computer also has some disadvandages ,some people are addicted in games, they waste much time to play in the computer,so they don't have much time to work and study.And,there are lots of trick things in the computer, so we usually be tricked by others though we don't konw ways. We should correctly treat the computer,and make full use of the computer.