作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达,一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
The story told us about that the three brother were employed by the company.But they received different wages because the three brother's working attitude are different. From my own perspective,attitude decides everything.For instance,Jim's attitude is negative and passive,which leads to he only received 500 dollars.In addition,Frank did what the supervisor said,but he is indifferent.For George,he not only did what the supervisor said perfectly but also did something extra without being told.I get inspiration from this story is that doing your work being positive. What's more,attitude is important and decisive to everyone.Taking an example,everyone takes the same test,but there are high scores and low scores.The reason why there are high scores and low scores is that their attitude to the test is different. The positive attitude gives you strength and negative attitude discourages you.Finally,we can draw a conclusion that attitude deceives everything.