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Dear teachers and schoolmates, May I have your attention please? I have an announcement to make.The theme of the seminar China Spaceflight)speaker: Professor LiBo of Peking University .Time: January 5th.Thursday afternoon at 2:30. Place: the school hall lecture introducing the background, brief history Chinese space development, development of the Shenzhou series of spacecraft and astronauts China. Note. Thank you for your participation.