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Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. The best ones to encourage a depressed soul are our friends. Remember once,I met a big trouble that I'm sick.Only Jim looking me everday,made me be very delighted.The experience made me know many truth:friend is the most mportant people,they can help us out of the woods.Have friend can make us feel very good.