作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰;连词使用偏少。
Now the Internet is more important and has played an important role in our live.By the Internet, it's easy to get the information from Internet that we need, improving our study and work. It is helpful for us to do somethings. However, some of the people think that the Internet has a bad effect of the teenagers. The teenagers are too young to resist some bad things from the Internet.Some of them indulge themselves in the Internet and at last they are away from the study. In my opinion, we should pay more attention to the advantages of the Internet and make the most of it.we should teach the teenagers how to use the Internet positively,and make the Internet a tool for their healthy development.