文章词汇表达比较灵活,学术词汇的使用要继续加强;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Our homeland is a developing country.As time goes by,it gets more and more beautiful,modern.So it is necessary for us to improve the citizens' qualities. But in our daily life,I see some people do some barbarian behavior frequently.For example,some children pick the flowers in park with the help of their parents.Some people throw rubbishes on the ground.Even someone speaks loudly wherever he is. In my opinion,these people’s behaviors will make bad influence,so all people should be taught to be well-behaved.Our life will get better and better!