Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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From the graph,Bureau of lobor statistics ,current population survey.we can easily know that education has closely relation with employment.Therefore,haaving a good education means having a better life in the future. As we can seen,the higher education people the have,the higher earning they get.The dates shows us that people less than high school diploma would get the low pays $451,which down the average pay $797.On the contary ,people who have doctoral degree would get $1551.Besides,the unemployment rate people with higher education will lower than those with lower education. In conclution,education plays a significiant role in our life ,which relates to our payment high or low .Therefore ,under no circumstances should we ignore the importance of getting a good education.Only after we receive a better education can we live a happy and colorful life.