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Dear editor My name is Earl.With the development of people's condition,more and more families have bought cars.Nevertheless,with the development of the automotive industry,more problems have been brought to our life.I and my classmates had a discussion of car problems. First of all.Many classmates pointed out the advantages of cars.They thought cars are convevient and fast,they are comfortable transportations.And then,they said car is not only a kind of transportation,but also a sign if one country is strong enough.At last,they said cars can make the other industries develop faster. However,if there is applaud,there must be opposition.The other classmates strongly disagree their points.The thuoght car is a murderer which destoryed enviroment.They said that car is the source of exhaust gas.And more an more cars could make triffic accident take place more frequently.Finally,they pointed out the problem of parking lot,too many cars will make this problem more and more serious. In my oppinion.I agree with the first group,because our society has been in development.And there is nothing can stop it.What we need to do is to design a kind car which cleaner and safer.