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I live in a small city.When it was a countryside,the ground over green.The trees were strong.Trees decorated the countryside to be a sea.The river is so clean that we could see fish play with each other.Although the houses were simple and crude,the roads were narrow,and the people were poor.People were good and honest,and we could get along well with each other.Everyone has a happy life. As time goes by,my city changes a lot.The houses are growing tall and multipurpose,the roads are becoming wide and cards can run on them fast and freely,and the factories are built up and them discharge some smelly gas.The environment is bad.Trees are fewer and fewer.River is dirty and fish can't live.City hardly wait to change the situation. I could never touch the happy life.