有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;作者句法知识扎实,可适当增加从句的使用;用词灵活多样,但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间。
As everyone can see, the environment we are living now is no better han before, human behaviours have largely impact other lives, both plants and animals, significantly, some of these impacts are negative ones. Some people claim that we cannot do anything about this because it is too late to revers this situation, while some others believe that there are something we can do to save this planet for our descendant. In my opinion, even if people has polluted this world, we still could take some actions to reduce the deterioration speed. Certainly, people's previous activities has changed this world in a bad way. For example, because of the development of the cities, more and more trees has been cut off for construction purpose. More over, some species went extinct due to the living places are polluted. However, there is something we can do to save this world and save other lives as much as we can. Firstly, people should learn how to share the earth with others. Mankind is not the one who owns this planet, instead, we are sharing it with plants and animals, so we need to respect them by we do not take their living space whenever we want to. Secondly, the government can protect this world by education and set up some regulations and laws. When people learn to love this world and cherish what we have now, we would not want to destroy it. Moreover, for people who are not well-educatend, they will follow the rules, regulations, and laws which set by the government, so they will protect this world, such as they should separate recycle wastes from normal rubbish. Lastly, there are some clean energies which we can use instead of the regular energies which we are using now. In other words, we can use tides, water, and wind to generate electricity, and also, we can use solar more. In conclusion, in last of a couple of decades, human's activies has made our environment not as good as before, which is what we should pay for our development. Nonetheless, there are some messures which we can use to slow down this trend, so we can pass a beautiful planet to our offsprings.