文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Dear editor, Nowadays in our city, more and more people own cars. I think there are good reasons for owning a car. First, with a car a person can get around freely, without spending a lot of time. Second, a car is comfortable to travel in. Finally, it is safer to drive a car than a bicycle. However, I am afraid more and more cars will cause air pollution. What’s more, more and more traffic jams and accidents are happening every day. Personally, I hope the government should control the number of cars to let us have a clean, quiet environment. I miss the blue sky and the green water!