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My problem I enjoy paining very much.A long time ago,I paid attention to drawing every day.However,I’m so busy now that I can’t find enough time to do the thing I love. In fact,many students who are at the same age as I feel stressed too. One major cause of stress is too much homework.We do not know when to work and when to play. I had to give up sortie of my hobbies.Do you have the same problem?