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文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，但学术词汇稍显不足；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. The best ones to encourage a depressed soul are our friends. It was three years ago when I just began to attend High School. For the first time I failed in an English exam which I thought I was best at. I felt very depressed. My best friend, Lily, tried to comfort me, offering her emotional support. She listened to me carefully and told me Edison succeeded in inventing the electric bulb after failing more than 300 times. Finally, with her patient encouragement, I overcame upset and was determined to try hard again. In the next exam, I did it. Encouragement is the best means to help someone feel better. It can give the courage to fight difficulties and motivate someone to move on.
