2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

词汇表达不够丰富，要增加学术词汇的使用；有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分；若增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩。

As we all known,excessive packaging become a popular trend.such mooncake box,more and more goods packaged more beautiful with the same quality. As far as i am concerned,excessive packaging become popular because people like beautiful things. You may think that the mooncake have quality problem because of bad packaging. From my point,everyone should think more highly of the quality than the packaging,In addition,business should produce goods with good quality and normal packaging in order to protect our environment.Only in this way,can we have a more healthy life