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Every summer, thousands of young students will go to the universities and colleges. There has been some questions for the students and families how to solve their college education. but in fact, the question will be do with in many ways. The most important way is to get all the money from the parents.If their parents can’t produce money that for the universities and colleges , students can borrow from the bank or friend. There is also another way. Students can solve their education by doing some part time jobs in their free time. As for me, my parents can pay the greater part of the money for me. So, I won’t have a heavy pressure, so I can put all my heart into study. I would like to pay the rest by doing a part time job. Although my parents are able to pay all the money for me, I just want to know more about the society by my own working experience. I choose this way to slove my college education.
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