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Memo To:Mary Chen From:Li Ming Re:New Year's Party Date:December 23,2008 It;s time again for the staff to have some activities to celebrate the New Year's Day.I know that you and some young guys have planned to hold an informal party.But in my opinion,i think we need do something different this year.As I will be in Beijing for a week,it is up to you and the young guys to decide on when and where to hold the party.Please let me know your final decision and whether I need do any preparation in advance. Yours, Li Ming