拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分;采用了一些简单的从句。
As we all know,excessive packaging become a usual trend.such mooncake box, goods packaged more beautiful with the same quality. As far as i am concerned,excessive packaging become popular because people like beautiful things. You may think that the mooncake have quality problem because of bad packaging. From my point,everyone should think more highly of the quality than the packaging,In addition,business should produce goods with good quality and normal packaging in order to protect our environment.Only in this way,can we have a more healthy life