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作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；学术词汇偏少，且文中有部分拼写错误；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. Everyone will have trouble one day. When we get into some difficutes, we could be emtremly nevourse. At that very moment, we need encouragements especially. For excample, two years ago, I faced a problem that is I was too nervouse when I saw math, because I think it is so hard. My friend Lily was the first one found my problem. She spent much time doing with the math problem with me. First of all, I even can not solve a very simple question. But with the help of Lily, I made a little program. Then, Lily gave me a huge encouragement. Her words were so warm that gave me brave to face my problem.In the end, I got over the problem. You see, encouragements from friends can give us powr and confidence to stand up and fight to the trouble. It play an important role when we get into difficutes.
