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Dear Jia Qi, Very glad to have received your letter. Now I’ll tell you about students’ taking the part-time jobs in Britain. Work in my spare time to the UK over the age of 15 senior high school students. So I can earn some money. We have no more than three hours a day. The seven night we wouldn't have to work, because the law does not allow. A week only can work 18 hours. So we are pretty relaxed. Students can help us to grow a lot. For example: 1.we can know so skii, such as questionnaire, interview and get along with people; 2. learn how to manage money; 3.good for learning.
