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Dear Mike, How are you getting on with everything? I’ve got some good news to tell you. I was chosen for the 2008 Beijing Olympics volunteers. I'm very happy. My job is to guide the wizard. I in August 12th to 18 days of work. So I want to improve my English and familiar with the regulations now. I will try my best to finish the work. I hope you can come to Beijing to watch the Olympic Games.