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20 October, Tuesday. Sunny weather. I finished my homework at home, decided to go to the cinema. Going to the cinema, I suddenly found a foreigner, standing on the side of the road is very anxious. So, I asked what happened. Both were not to understand what someone is saying. Finally, we use body language to know the meaning. The forigner wanted to go to the people's park. So you call a taxi, and told the driver where he will. Then, I went to the cinema.